Sunday, January 22, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday: Virgo (WIP)-Dance Club Scene #1

This week's post is the opening of my WIP "Virgo." I'm hoping to stay in this scene for the next few Sundays.

Also, and I admit this with some shame, I have figured out how to reply to individual comments. Thank you to everyone who has left comments in the past few weeks. I will attempt to be a better blogger.



Roundabout AMG / 11:14 Delilah

Sam tapped SEND, refreshed his phone app, and watched the interactions on her FaceSpace roll like a digital stop-clock counting down seconds. At the same time, faces in the crowd became under-lit one after another by push notes from Ma Bell wireless.  Outside of the club, a steady line of headlights could be seen turning onto Silk Road from I-25, even as the excitement of the growing crowd threatened to shake the condemned building to ground.

Over his shoulder, a pair of zig-zagged soles dangled from the balcony. A little higher, a pair of slender hands loosely held the bars on either side of a hooded head, fingers tapping to the beat the DJ was laying down.



Please check out the other authors at Six Sentence Sunday. Some of my favorites are Jayel Kaye, sarah Ballance, Krystal Wade, Monica Enderle Pierce, Siobhan Muir, Sarah W., and Pippa Jay.

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18 comments:

  1. I really, really want to read the rest of this, Wendy!

    I love how you use technology to such descriptive advantage!

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    1. Thanks Sarah! I like technology and this WIP revolves a rather cool bit.

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  2. Interesting six! I'm so curious what all those phone messages were about! Very intriguing!

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  3. Interesting and descriptive writing. I have to admit I had to read this several times to figure out what was happening. Will be back for more snippets.

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    1. Thanks. That's good to know. This is still in draft, so I'll take a look at it.

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  4. For a minute I thought someone was about to jump. Boy where is my mind. But they're just hanging out. :-) I love FACEspace! Such a cute way to spin facebook.

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    1. Thank you Krystal. I mulled over which social network site was going to be more popular in my timeline. Then I thought, what if one bought the other? :)

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  5. This six has an interesting atmosphere; kind of cold because it uses technology as the stepping stone for description, and kind of booming because of the crowd, the lights and the DJ.

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  6. FaceSpace--nice! This is definitely building up towards something interesting!

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  7. Very visual and easy to see. Thanks for sharing!

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    1. Viven, thank you. I hope to keep the images flowing.

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  8. I like this. Can't wait to see more!

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  9. Ah you took me back to my college club days in downtown L.A. -- when I was young enough to dance all night and still make it to class the next day. :) thanks for the memory. And thanks for the link! So generous!

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    1. Awesome! So glad I got it :) and I love your snippets.

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