Sunday, May 27, 2012

#SixSunday - Circle of the Butterfly #4

Last Week, Liasneh's box opened, releasing butterflies into Erik's throne room, and revealing a dead child laid to rest with wild flowers. This next six happens roughly at the same time, hundreds of miles away. The point of view belongs to Erik's son, Prince Briar, who along with two of Colette's guardians, is following the path of destruction left by Liasneh's men through a region called "The Ruby String." The three were sent into the woods simply to punish the prince for embarrassing his father. The rumors weren't taken seriously by Erik's court; Briar and the knights weren't expected to find anything.


Death waited for them beyond the veil of smoke.

The wind shifted, Briar dug in his heels, and his horse charged deeper into the burning woods.

It was neither bravery nor desire on his part; he'd never been accused of having much of the former, and the latter he reserved for carnal delights. Anticipation pushed him between the smoldering trees and into the clearing moments before a comet crossed behind him, spooking his horse.

The prince pushed up from the ground just enough to spit out dirt and watched with awe the ring of fire chasing a flurry of leaves along the tree line.

He followed the flame until his eye fell on Shannen standing with her arms outstretched, eyes cast skyward, balanced upon the village well in the eye of the storm.


Please check out the other talented writers participating in this week's Six Sentence Sunday. These are some of my favorites: Sarah BallanceKrystal WadeMonica Enderle PierceSiobhan MuirSarah W.Pippa Jay, Kelly Seguin, and Steven Montano.

23 comments:

  1. I can't see this ending well for the prince. But still very entertaining to read.

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  2. Whenever men are sent on a routine, boring, punishment detail, they will find something and it won't be kittens and puppies . ..

    Great six! :)

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  3. You always have such a powerfully descriptive 6 and this was no exception! Very exciting and draws you in! Awesome 6!

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  4. Great description! Sounds like the village is about to meet its end.

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  5. I do not intend to sound like a broken record, however, your imagery is staggering! Where can I buy this book? I'm with L.J. and Dee! Sincerely Wendy, I wish I had a quarter of your ability to capture images.

    Awesome Six!

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  6. Thank you, everyone! As for where you can buy it...it's actually a shelved novel, though I am tossing around the idea of submitting it, after another round of editing.

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  7. Your imagery just keeps getting better and better. That first line is a killer!

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  8. Love the tone and the description - the comet was unexpected - so much happening. Really gets the Reader involved. Great six!

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  9. Beautifully envisioned and vividly written. Your prose is exceptional and immediately puts your reader into the heart of the scene. So well done, Wendy. Bravo!!!

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  10. What an engaging blend of imagery and inner thoughts. Please do edit and submit this for publication. I'll line up to buy it!

    --Kimberly K. Comeau

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  11. Fantastic atmosphere! That first line is awesome!

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  12. As everyone one else stated... awesome imagery! Great Six!

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  13. Amazing imagery. Very well done!

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  14. Great imagery, powerful scene! Nice six, Wendy :-)

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  15. Wow, spooky six. Sounds like a fun tale, Wendy. Thanks so much for the mention. :)

    Siobhan

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  16. Amazing writing! Beautiful, vivid, powerful ... I second and third and fourth+ all of those compliments!

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  17. I love the images you conjured up in my mind while reading this. I love death lore, so your opening line for this six sent shivers of pleasure racing down my spine. Well done!

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  18. Fire AND a ground-level comet? No wonder the horse spooked!

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  19. Love the end. Vivid, eerie description and you counted it so well with the reality of the less-than-heroic hero. Nice six, Wendy!

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  20. You may get tired of me praising your descriptions, Wendy, but I'm going to keep doing it, because the imagery and detail in your Six Sunday snippets keep getting better and better!

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