Sunday, March 11, 2012

#SixSunday: Virgo (WIP)-Dance Club Scene #8

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Last week, Sam was relieved that Delilah didn't perform the remix he was expecting (and dreading), but the woman's change of mind concerns him, too. Her remix first stuns, then delights Adam. I'm jumping forward a tiny bit here.

Sam looked at his watch and fanned his shirt away from his skin. Eight more minutes in this sauna until the police moved in to crash the party. He watched the ravers packed like live sardines in a can—wall-to-wall with no AC—and thought it would be a small miracle if no one dropped dead. Still, he wished time to slow so he could lose himself in the scene. Her touch on the vinyl, whatever ruckus it created, was reverent as rite. Given enough time, her music became sacrament to him, listening became prayer, and knowing her was a blessing, but flash raves never lasted that long.

Please check out the other authors at Six Sentence Sunday. Some of my favorites are Jayel Kaye, Sarah Ballance, Krystal Wade, Monica Enderle Pierce, Siobhan Muir, Sarah W., Pippa Jay, and Kelly Seguin.

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24 comments:

  1. christine warnerMarch 11, 2012 at 8:25 AM

    Nicley written six! Loved it :)

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  2. AnonymousMarch 11, 2012 at 8:27 AM

    Loved it, especially the last line!

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    1. WendyMarch 11, 2012 at 8:32 AM

      Thanks so much, Angela. That last line took an hour to get right :)

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  3. Moira ReidMarch 11, 2012 at 10:11 AM

    "Given enough time, her music became sacrament to him, listening became prayer, and knowing her was a blessing, but flash raves never lasted that long."

    Love that!! Great six!

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  4. Candice BundyMarch 11, 2012 at 11:05 AM

    Adore the references to reverence and sacrament. Reinforces the depth of emotion in those stolen moments.

    Nicely done!

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    1. WendyMarch 11, 2012 at 11:18 AM

      I love religion. There's just so much to play with. :)

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  5. Sarah WMarch 11, 2012 at 11:14 AM

    Add me to the list of last line fans! Am I right that there's a touch of more-than-friendship here?

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    1. WendyMarch 11, 2012 at 11:17 AM

      There's more than friendship here, but maybe not the way you're thinking. :D

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  6. Sue Ann BowlingMarch 11, 2012 at 12:48 PM

    He know to the minute when the police are coming?

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  7. Siobhan MuirMarch 11, 2012 at 12:50 PM

    Great descriptive six, Wendy. I really could see the club and experience it.

    And thanks for the mention! :D

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  8. Kelly SeguinMarch 11, 2012 at 12:56 PM

    Ohh great six, Wendy! (I didn't get a sneak peak of this) :) I love it! Can't wait to read more.

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  9. Monica Enderle PierceMarch 11, 2012 at 12:58 PM

    Oooh, so much to like in these six! The comparison of the rave to religion and his worship of her is fabulous, as is your pacing. Lurve!

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    1. WendyMarch 11, 2012 at 3:55 PM

      It's always so great to hear you like it, Monica!

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  10. Sarah BallanceMarch 11, 2012 at 1:04 PM

    Beautifully written!

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  11. K.E. Saxon, AuthorMarch 11, 2012 at 6:30 PM

    Oh, wow! What a cliffhanger, here. What's going on, why does he know when the police are going to show up? Great six, and I loved the use of religious terms as metaphor for his reaction to her.

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  12. AnonymousMarch 11, 2012 at 7:29 PM

    Wonderful six! Makes me want to read more :)

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  13. Pippa JayMarch 12, 2012 at 5:18 AM

    I almost expect him to get down on his knees and pray to her!

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