Last week, Delilah threw off her hoodie, showed us her fashion sense, and put on glasses she doesn't need to wear. There's one minute to go until Delilah does...whatever she's got planned.
At 11:13, while Delilah’s fingers danced on her laptop, Adam transitioned from electro into a sultry layering of R&B rhythms, harmony, and phrasing. Sam’s racing pulse tripped when a tick of a metronome rose above Adam’s bass line, growing louder every second. She was really going to do Flawed, he thought with both anticipation and dread. The room plunged into darkness as the the spotlights cut out, all but for the dim lamps around the equipment.
“Hello, Lincoln!” Adam yelled into his microphone, and the crowd answered him with a roar.
At 11:14, Delilah hit the return key on her laptop; Sam crossed himself like the good Catholic he used to be.
Writers! Participation in SSS is straightforward. Submit a link to the host site between 6:00 pm Tuesday and 11:59 pm on Saturday. Post a six sentence excerpt on your blog by 9 am Eastern (US) on Sunday.
Definitely want to know where this is leading...love the way you wrote it with the timeline...nice touch :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Christine :)
DeleteGreat six and love the new look of the blog! Very nice!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Krystal. I like this blog look much better. :)
DeleteYou do such a great job with description while keeping the tension up, great 6!
ReplyDelete(FYI-blogspot has a kink in their code that doesn't show the Captcha code for WordPress users, so I can't log in that way and then have to try alternatives. You might consider turning off Captcha on Sundays...)
I have captcha?! I didn't know I was using captcha. [goes to turn that crap off.]
DeleteCaptcha should be disabled. Could the next person who comments let me know if they get it?
DeleteYou've built wonderful tension in this series of snippets, and I love that last line!
ReplyDeleteThanks. I'm hoping next week's six is a worthy payoff. :)
DeleteAnd I didn't get snagged by Captcha. Thank gawd.
ReplyDeleteOh, that's good news!
DeleteGreat tension building and fantastic description. Wonderful six!
ReplyDeleteI tried to comment on Kelly's SSS but it wouldn't let me. The code was cut off and there was no way to scroll down in the box. Please let her know I visited and enjoyed her six! ;c)
DeleteThanks Sarah. Yeah, Kelly's blog is a little messed up on the back end. She's working out the kinks.
DeleteGreat Six. I'm intrigued...
ReplyDeleteThank you, Ute.
DeleteI'm changing music genre's right along with them. Great descriptions.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Graylin.
DeleteNew to this story but the last line really has me intrigued.
ReplyDeleteI'm glad. Thanks for stopping by, Claire.
DeleteGreat job! The good Catholic he used to be...love that!
ReplyDeleteThanks D'Ann!
DeleteGreat description, love the last line!
ReplyDeleteThank you, Paula!
DeleteLove what's happening here with these two! Great atmosphere.
ReplyDeleteAlso, Wendy, I went to Kelly's site and tried to leave this message: "Very intense! I love the deep POV. Superb. Sorry you got stricken from the list, that is just a cryin' shame. But I'll try you again next week!"
BUT, it wouldn't scroll down so that I could even *see* both of the code "words" I was supposed to put in in order to post--have a feeling this may be happening a lot to your friend, as there were "0" posts on her blog. You might want to help her fix her comment box. Hugs, and see you next week, K :)
Thank you, K. E. And I've forwarded your comment onto Kelly. She's working out the blog kinks. Hopefully next week will be better. :)
DeleteLove the last line!! Great six!!
ReplyDeleteFantastic work.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Alix!
DeleteI like the setup. Having played in clubs for 20 years, I love the way you build up the environment.
ReplyDeleteThanks Nick. That is certainly good to hear :)
DeleteSpooky and tension filled six, Wendy. I enjoyed the setup and can't wait to see what happens next. :)
ReplyDeleteWonderful snippet!
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