Sunday, February 19, 2012

#SixSunday: Virgo (WIP)-Dance Club Scene #5

Every once in a while, I hate my blog so much I have to change it. Fortunately, Blogger makes that very easy. But, don't get used to it...I love it right now, but I'm bound to get tired of it again.

Last week, Delilah spoke to Adam and they seemed to get along, and Sam notes to himself that the other man has no idea of the compliment he's just been paid. Next, Delilah gets ready to work.



At 11:12, Delilah unzipped her hoodie and tossed it blindly over her shoulder. Her outfit was basic and representative of her entire wardrobe. A too-small t-shirt with a faded print of Grouchy Smurf, baggy capris, and sneakers…baby blue, of course. Her dark brown hair, streaked blonde and blue, was tied back in a sloppy knot. She spread gloss on her lips with her pinky, slipped the tube in her pocket, then pulled the vintage horn rimmed frames off her head. Sam chuckled as she slipped them over her 20/20 eyes.



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31 comments:

  1. Great description of her. Now, I can't wait to see what she can do! :)

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  2. Wonderful description, terrific six.

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  3. Very descriptive. :D Great six...has me curious.

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  4. Baby blue, of course! Lets your reader see her quite clearly! Good job!

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  5. Some wonderful description, but it's the last sentence that grabbed my interest the most. Seeming contradictions like that spawn a lot of questions in my mind and is the sort of thing I love reading in books.

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    1. I enjoy them too. It provides a nice surprise every once in a while.

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  6. Great descriptions. I love watching through Sam's eyes, he's very good at noticing details...

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    1. Thank you, Angela. The details he notices, and misses, play a part in the plot :)

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  7. Great description of her. He has an eye for detail and she has an intriguing sense of fashion lol.

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    1. Thanks, DeAnna. She's got some style :)

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  8. Hey Grouchy Smurf needs love too ;)
    Great 6, nicely descriptive.

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    1. Doesn't Grouchy Smurf rock? I love him.

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  9. Terrific details -- lots of insight into her personality here.

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    1. I hope so. This is an extended exercise in showing something I intend to reveal later. I'm hoping it'll be an "oh!" moment for the reader.

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  10. Wow. I have a clear mental picture of her. Wonderful. I especially love that she didn't just put gloss on, but she did it with her pinky. I love it when writers find new ways to say the same thing. Great description. ;)

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  11. Great visualization! I can totally see her and also got some great insight into her personality.

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    1. Thanks, Skye. I'm so glad she's coming through. :)

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  12. Good description. Curious to learn more.

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  13. Great description. I love that she's a Smurfs fan. I think I liked all the Smurfs but Smurfette. My mother tells me I used to complain that she was too girly.

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  14. You packed a lot into those six sentences and what a great hook to end on!

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  15. Amazingly descriptive. You've drawn SUCH a picture of her! Great six!
    Amy Durham

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  16. Really cool description; the non-traditional type of girl for sure. Cool character.

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  17. So very easy to get into this scene with the way you've described her, which is freaking fantastic! She sounds FUN! (PS: thank you for the mention!)

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  18. Great description. I can really picture her in my head.

    Oh, and I'm the same with having to change my blog every so often, so you're not alone! :-D

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